I think there are problems with the outline.
The spouses: how do they relate to the bloggers/blogging?
It seems as though Dana is fully aware the whole time. She therefore cannot catch on at the end. She can only discover that Julian has not ‘gotten over it.’
Scott has to catch on at a certain point. That would be just around the time Julian learns Amy/Lana’s true identity and location. He responds to this by hitting her. She responds by defying him. (Brave woman!) She also can’t help herself. She’s desperate.
(OK, sort of fixed the above.)
But now, I don’t really feel/like the ending.
Perhaps Julian and Dana should got the Parkersburg together and visit the stricken Lana. And then, what of Scott? He must be captured and tried. (For murder, because she does die.)
And then?
Does Julian write all of this up as “Bloggers” which he sells?
Maybe that’s the ticket. Maybe that’s the thicket.